comments on the anime story

[Osiris]

well said fault u just said all the things i wanted to say but didn't have the time to type up ...........                    

[Zero-X]

well u have a point fault, as for my posts, my grammar was a lil weak since i started but it shall improve over time, and not all characters are immortal, cuz i'm cybernetic, and my master(Raikou) granted me to use the power of telepathy bcuz if it was radio, distance-wise, it wouldn't work...

and maybe on the next story we will be more organised, maybe...                    

[Fault]

I never said all were immortal. I remember using the words "so many"....                    

[Evangelion_01]

Hey Fault, I don't mind the critique of my grammar-after all most of my posts were typed in a hurry-lack of lengthy internet time. My bad there-I take responsibility for that. I don't mind the criticism man-its part and parcel of making me a better writer but as long as you don't tell me WHAT to do with my character and his profile I don't mind. SO go ahead man-criticise I'll listen. But just don't tell me how to run things with my character in terms of his actions and thoughts and atitududes and we go be fine.

You cool?                    

[Lafiel]

fault dont be so mean ok.some times most people dont have sufficient net time to write and clean up grammar.i would like to see your skills in action if u dont mind so lighten up a little                    

[Fault]

Like to see my skills in action? OK. I not a wiriting genius or anything and I don't feel I better than nebody but next story you have give me a character and I'll see what I can do...                    

[ShowTime]

...I just need to die...or go away or something.  Yea...just need to get out of that story.  Please, let's start another one.  A COMPLETELY DIFFERENT ONE!!!

And take out some people.