Comments on the anime story

[The_Dark_Goddess]

Okay, so we have people readin our lil thread and all that, and they have things to say about it.
thus far no one diss it, which is good.

However, we would prefer to keep the thread itself free of anything but posts that add to the story.

So if anyone has any comments or critics, good or bad, please post them here.                    

[androsovic]

YES! I DISSING IT!! ALL OF ALLYUH IS AH BUNCH OF MC SPAMMERS!!! WHY ALLYUH CAH COLLABORATE AND PRINT IT WHEN ALLYUH DONE                    

[Waggy]

YES! I DISSING IT!! ALL OF ALLYUH IS AH BUNCH OF MC SPAMMERS!!! WHY ALLYUH CAH COLLABORATE AND PRINT IT WHEN ALLYUH DONE

Then we wont be able to read it, DA!!

Anyways, yes, there are some errors.
I take it all of them are heroes of some sort or the other. they are revealed at the same time, more or less, but some still holds more mystery than others. You're writing the same thing, don't change style that way.
You all have different moods, from vocabulary to length of sentences. it might be better if you did it by chapters or so. This also prevents someone passing it on in the middle of an interesting scene and someone else speeds up or slows down.
I have more ctricisism, but I'm not into it.                    

[Polios]

that chp thing is alright, but it will be a weird format for this kinda thing                    

[ShowTime]

well, it's a rolepley, if we got together and wrote it up and then displayed it, it wouldn't be a roleplay anymore.  at least i dont think so.

everyone has to learn how to let their characters adapt to their surroundings, other characters, and other writers.  that's what makes it different from just a normal story                    

[The_Dark_Goddess]

well, it's a rolepley, if we got together and wrote it up and then displayed it, it wouldn't be a roleplay anymore.  at least i dont think so.

everyone has to learn how to let their characters adapt to their surroundings, other characters, and other writers.  that's what makes it different from just a normal story

yep.
my thoughts exactly                    

[Evangelion_01]

Well Waggy is a man who knows of what he speaks. And I agreee somewhat with him on his ideas. BUT its the lil fact of time and characterisain. Hey if I had a month to do not ONE shite-I'd write EVERY characters part....